大家来纠错 Sai

wangyuan

                                                     SAI AMONG STRUGGLERS SINCE NOW
Stuffed with awful things,my life has become a mess.

For the whole semester，I've alway been so busy.The feeling is just like the expire of a human being.So exhuasted!

Ok，firstly,let me start my topic with the incident in my real life just a some minutes gone.

Just a few minutes ago,i came back from my student house,an embarrassing situation here that i mixed up my usually fixed schedule.

I didn't realized this before i get into her family,then i have to retreat(just like a going war).In reality,i have refused his next rewarding(veiled at present),i mean it is probably i will not go there again at the new term.

From Shakespeare,i got that"brivety is the soul of wit".

I'm reasonably conviced it is also applicable to our inricate life.

Always i just want to find a peaceful place to stay and put my messed minds in order.

For my perspective,ofen study counts much more than anything else.So i sincerely hope this day that i can control my minds would come soon.

On the way to my dream,I am not alone,some be-respected seniors has set a good example for me,so i have a long way to go.

Never hesitate too long,and make a snap decision,then struggle for it.

Just move it!!

                                                                                                                                                           Sai 2011.8 Night

力挽长矢

不会纠错~~帮你顶~~

秋。

板凳~我从来没写过这样的文~帮顶~

冲动是魔鬼

地铺！表示看不懂，帮顶！

末示夕

找鱼爷搞定

wangyuan

力挽长矢 发表于 2011-8-8 08:25
不会纠错~~帮你顶~~

谢谢你了

wangyuan

秋。 发表于 2011-8-8 08:32
板凳~我从来没写过这样的文~帮顶~

写得如何啊

wangyuan

冲动是魔鬼 发表于 2011-8-8 08:44
地铺！表示看不懂，帮顶！

我已经快要记住你这个图像了

wangyuan

末示夕 发表于 2011-8-8 09:28
找鱼爷搞定

谢谢你啊

wangyuan

yyyiii 发表于 2011-8-8 11:14
我来帮你纠吧。。
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诶，改地不错哦

冲动是魔鬼

wangyuan 发表于 2011-8-8 22:30
我已经快要记住你这个图像了

其实，关键是下边的字幕！

津。

随便帮你改改吧……
"just a some minutes gone"   ??
"my student house"——是my student's house 还是想说学生宿舍(dormitory) ？
“……an embarrassing situation here that i mixed up my usually fixed schedule” 好像缺谓语…….
“I'm reasonably conviced it is also ……”   convice?? 什么意思……
“For my perspective……”  介词应该用 from 吧……
,I am not alone,some be-respected seniors has set a good example for me,so i have a long way to go.
没有因果关系吧……

津。

整体上感觉有点中国式英语诶……
个人拙见……

落根草

帮顶的路过……

秋。

wangyuan 发表于 2011-8-8 22:30
写得如何啊

挺好的哈~~~~·！

wangyuan

津。 发表于 2011-8-8 22:42
随便帮你改改吧……
"just a some minutes gone"   ??
"my student house"——是my student's house 还是想 ...

恩恩，修改得好

wangyuan

津。 发表于 2011-8-8 22:43
整体上感觉有点中国式英语诶……
个人拙见……

点到位了

wangyuan

落根草 发表于 2011-8-8 22:46
帮顶的路过……

谢谢这位

wangyuan

秋。 发表于 2011-8-9 08:25
挺好的哈~~~~·！

好吧，可能你没有好好看